8 XXX : doujinshi

Now I don't claim to be a manga critic, while there's no glaring flaw I just found myself unsatisfied. Was it the art style? The lack(or rather forced) of chemistry between the two? Art not sexy enough? Not too sure, just felt like I ate a dish without salt and pepper. Still, an acceptable offering as I don't see blasphemous content.
>blow me please I dunno why but that scene just feels outta place here like: >Do you want a girlfriend, let's go out, let's kiss, eyy suck my dick Anyway this doujin feels like vanilla extract. Yeah vanilla's a great flavor but you don't wanna just chug it like this where the vanilla overrides the story and characters and I dunno where I'm going with this analogy but I think it still stands. Anyway this is just lacking everything except for the cute girl. Top panel, page 13 is pretty hot though.